“It’s TOO late Jason! plus it’s a Wednesday and there’s 1 minute to 11 ”
Jennifer shouted,she WAS Jason’s friend, but he got HER angry! Jason is a 16 years old school boy who’s parent’s had died, he is so lonely, and just HAD a friend, to tell the truth, he isn’t so poor. He does have a flat, but it was as small as a cottage. I want to tell you something, something BAD, that is, every Wednesday, he would have a nightmare, a horrible one, and the next day his nightmare would become true. Isn’t that scary, I think it is a terrible thing, an awful thing, It’s is exactly 11:00 O’clock and Jason was going to sleep. (and was going to have a nightmare) that night Jason had a vision that horrible school boys robes him and chucks him out his small flat BECAUSE OF JENNIFER. I bet you your thinking, why would she do such thing, his parent’s had died and he’s lonely. Well obviously no one cares about him.
The very next day, poor Jason woke up and found himself near a dustbin, why was he there? Yes I remember now, his nightmare became true. He stood up and saw a 1 way road, then in the corner of his eye, he saw… well, he didn’t know what it was. But, he thought he knew there was knows there was no danger around that corner, how should he know?he’s not a angel to know everything, so he walked near the place, and saw a long tree. He went closer and closer to the tree, then looked straight up and, and saw…. a long red rope hanging from he the sky. He was so scared, he didn’t know what to do, what do you think he should do? Well this is what he done, he went closer and closer, he was shivering, he thought someone would come and kill him. Put he slowly put his hand up because HE KNEWWW (again) there was going to be no danger, so he kept him hand up and… PULLED IT! it was light, sun was there, ” am I dreaming?” Jason whispered to himself, for a few seconds he stood as still as a dead man in his grave. Jason pulled it once more, and, it was night time, it was pure black, then he got the point, so he pulled and pulled and pulled, then got use to it. So he pulled it even harder and, and, it was night time, he puled it again it was still night, pure black, how could it be? Jason heard shouting in 1 corner ” Yes, take then down NOW! they deserve it!” Jason see’s people coming closer to him. He was so shocked and whispered to himself ” If I get killed my life would be over” so he ran as fast as a cheater, then saw a police, in HIS small flat. ” Oh no what shall I do?” George questioned himself, the police saw Jason, and knew it was his flat, so he got out, and let him in. Jason went in and saw Jennifer, ” I’m so sorry I was acting like this, it was because my parent’s died, and, and no-one liked me, but then, I planned something so I could get liked, please would you be friend’s with me” There was quiet, ” Yes, yes I’m your friend” So they were friends for many years and then got married, they had a happy life and lived happily ever after.
Made By Leyla

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Well done Leyla, I liked your story and especially the use of bold writing to make a point. I think it works well, as long as you don’t over use it!
we loved the bit about the tree it was so cool !
What an interesting and dark version of the story Leyla! I’m really impressed. You used some really brilliant devices to hook the reader. I particularly like the first paragraph – what an opening!
You are a talented writer Leyla – it’s great to see you showing what you can do on the blog. I can’t wait to read more…